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  • TechnoHippy 6 Jul 2012 08:38:33 14,707 posts
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    @Metalfish

    Excellent, a new chapter to read :-)

    I found the opening paragraph a little clumsy, but afte rthat it seemed to flow well. Some good back and forth between captor and prisoner.

    And yes, it was a little wicked.
  • Metalfish 10 Jul 2012 22:00:17 8,937 posts
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    Right. I'm calling this Chapter done. For now.
  • TechnoHippy 11 Jul 2012 08:59:13 14,707 posts
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    @Metalfish

    Excellent, some good description and turn of phrase as always. The lead up to the battle feels authentic and I liked The Chained, I'm hoping we find out more about them.
  • Metalfish 11 Jul 2012 09:32:41 8,937 posts
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    @Techno,

    He's first introduced here. He holds the honour of being the second sweariest character.

    I might well introduce him a heck of a lot earlier, since he's fighting for his life in the approaches at the beginning of the book (while everyone else is wandering around in safe-old Ironhearth) and we only meet him in the aftermath. He'd be a pretty good opportunity to get some action in early on, anyway.
  • TechnoHippy 11 Jul 2012 13:33:25 14,707 posts
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    @Metalfish

    I think I'm going to have to read the whole draft through again when you're done (if you want me to).
  • Metalfish 11 Jul 2012 13:51:31 8,937 posts
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    Well, if you want to see how I go from "stick up my arse pretentious" to settling somewhere around my own voice, it's a pretty good draft to read. I'll email you one, since the blog is pretty out of date (intentionally, really).
  • TechnoHippy 11 Jul 2012 14:27:05 14,707 posts
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    Probably best to email it once you're done and I can go through the whole thing. I'll still provide spot feedback as you post as well.
  • Metalfish 11 Jul 2012 17:53:42 8,937 posts
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    Fair enough. It's not really that far off end of draft. Maybe 30k words. Depends how the end act-type-bit plays out.
  • TechnoHippy 14 Jul 2012 20:44:55 14,707 posts
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    Well I've finished a proof read pass, but I found quite a few mistakes, so I'll do another pass before working on the layout.
  • Metalfish 14 Jul 2012 21:55:02 8,937 posts
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    I always say you'll have to read something five times before you get all the mistakes out. And I don't really mean all the mistakes either.
  • TechnoHippy 15 Jul 2012 10:11:58 14,707 posts
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    Indeed, I'll keep going through it until I'm satisfied. I've been tempted to get it done professionally, but it's not cheap.
  • Metalfish 15 Jul 2012 11:09:24 8,937 posts
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    Send me your latest copy. I'm not as good as a real editor, but I'm not bad. I'm doing anything else today.
  • TechnoHippy 15 Jul 2012 11:43:24 14,707 posts
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    Much appreciated, can you pm me your email address and I'll email you the latest draft. Thanks.
  • Metalfish 15 Jul 2012 12:11:49 8,937 posts
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    No prob. Will edit and make endless comments in my usual style.
  • TechnoHippy 15 Jul 2012 12:15:36 14,707 posts
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    Excellent :-)
  • Metalfish 15 Jul 2012 16:46:28 8,937 posts
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    Ahoy hoy, chucked my edit of the first half back at ya.

    Edited by Metalfish at 16:46:40 15-07-2012
  • TechnoHippy 15 Jul 2012 17:21:36 14,707 posts
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    Good stuff, I'm going through it now.
  • Metalfish 20 Jul 2012 21:33:51 8,937 posts
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    Bugger me this thread has gone quiet.

    Chapter 22. I think this might be the longest chapter I've written for this one. It's certainly the most action packed. I do fear this means I've written it like a five year old.

    Still, basically nothing happens.
  • Metalfish 20 Jul 2012 23:15:33 8,937 posts
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    Also: 100,000 words. I am unreasonably pleased with this arbitrary number.
  • MetalDog 20 Jul 2012 23:18:29 23,928 posts
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    Pardon my quietness. Been a bit busy elsewhere, but hope to be less busy sometime. Especially by Nov, or I'll be buggered.

    Well done on the tonne btw!

    Edited by MetalDog at 23:18:45 20-07-2012
  • Metalfish 20 Jul 2012 23:26:01 8,937 posts
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    Does this count as 'catching up' for that last two NaNos that this pile of words has spanned?

    EDIT: MD, you polished up that draft? I'm accepting edit drafts, though I'll be in the middle of Techno's at the mo and I've got two more to read.

    Edited by Metalfish at 23:27:26 20-07-2012
  • MetalDog 21 Jul 2012 00:08:09 23,928 posts
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    Given my last horrific overrun I'm in no position to deny you the catch up =)

    Alas no, I ought to have done it, but I have not, because I suck. Thank you for the offer, though, you specialise in copy edit, yes? May need one if I ever stop sucking and do the non copy stuff.
  • TechnoHippy 21 Jul 2012 10:17:10 14,707 posts
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    100,000 words is a good number. And I can vouch for Metalfish's editing prowess, he's helped in a big way with me finishing The Cult of Me.
  • Metalfish 21 Jul 2012 11:44:24 8,937 posts
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    It give me something to do with my Sundays. Never could get the hang of Sundays.
  • Metalfish 21 Jul 2012 23:23:12 8,937 posts
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    Writing drunk. Even now I can tell I'm going to slap myself when I edit this.
  • Metalfish 21 Jul 2012 23:52:47 8,937 posts
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  • TechnoHippy 24 Jul 2012 08:25:22 14,707 posts
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    Well I've done it, the layout and cover has been uploaded so should be available very soon. It's my 40th birthday on Sunday so I'll do the 'official' launch then.

    I'll be getting in touch with everyone who has helped me individually, but I'd also like to do a group thank you for everyone's help.

    /Group hug :-)
  • MetalDog 25 Jul 2012 13:24:39 23,928 posts
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    No hugging!

    But you are welcome and I wish you the best of sales, it was a good yarn even in first draft.
  • TechnoHippy 25 Jul 2012 13:34:17 14,707 posts
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    Thanks. I was hoping to be able to give everyone who helped along the way a free copy, but there's no way to gift Kindle books in the UK store :-(
  • TechnoHippy 25 Jul 2012 13:34:48 14,707 posts
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    And I give good hugs - you don't know what you're missing ;-)
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