National Novel Writing Month 2012 Page 23

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  • TechnoHippy 10 Nov 2012 13:10:11 14,707 posts
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    @MetalDog

    Nice to see an update.

    Interesting idea on the environment controllers having opinions and them being suppressed.

    Reading on they seem to be a big deal - has there been a previous event I'm not aware of? The Vera Lynn was mentioned, is that the first book - I seem to recall it mentioned in last years book>

    Rogue 's' in: "on her desk, then s said, "
  • Carbon_Altered 10 Nov 2012 13:12:43 737 posts
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    @TechnoHippy - Thanks Techno and apologies for the missing punctuation - Another mystery!
  • santashi 10 Nov 2012 14:51:23 5,167 posts
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    TechnoHippy wrote:
    @santashi

    I think so - one side is the real person, the other is the character she plays?
    Okay, thanks. :)
  • TechnoHippy 10 Nov 2012 14:52:52 14,707 posts
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    Am I right?
  • TechnoHippy 10 Nov 2012 15:10:34 14,707 posts
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    Chapter 15 whistles nonchalantly past the policeman:

    http://zenapocalypse.blogspot.co.uk/2012/11/faust-20-chapter-15.html
  • TechnoHippy 10 Nov 2012 20:54:40 14,707 posts
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    Sniffing the air cautiously chapter 16 bounds over the field:

    http://zenapocalypse.blogspot.co.uk/2012/11/faust-20-chapter-16.html
  • Carbon_Altered 10 Nov 2012 21:18:25 737 posts
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    So this is where I experiment with flashback, space whores and talking bushes

    Chapter 9
  • Carbon_Altered 10 Nov 2012 21:34:08 737 posts
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    @TechnoHippy - I'm a little bit behind, on chapter 6. Another rather unsavory character. Actually found myself missing the demon a bit as it went on - was kinda hoping he'd be on the end of the line when Mikhail got his one phone call.

    One minor question: "Naturally his guards were armed, but they’d only get a few years for possession" - I presume you mean possession of a firearm? But possession in this context reads a bit like drugs rather than the guns.
  • RobTheBuilder 10 Nov 2012 21:36:25 6,521 posts
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    I'm at that point where I've reached a bit I'm enjoying, and am trying not to use up so much that it becomes repetitive later...

    Think some extra notes have helped...!

    More up later I think.
  • TechnoHippy 10 Nov 2012 21:41:32 14,707 posts
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    @Carbon_Altered

    I enjoyed the conversation about the probe - is the fate of the seventh probe significant to the story?

    Companions? Sounds familiar :-)
  • TechnoHippy 10 Nov 2012 21:42:39 14,707 posts
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    @Carbon_Altered

    Yes it refers to the guns. Thanks for the feedback.
  • Carbon_Altered 10 Nov 2012 22:39:15 737 posts
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    TechnoHippy wrote:

    Companions? Sounds familiar :-)
    Yeah, I had half a memory that I'd stolen that term from somewhere, but couldn't quite place it - was it Firefly?

    I wanted to try and make it a bit grittier, but it is hard describing that sort of stuff

    Edited by Carbon_Altered at 22:41:06 10-11-2012
  • MetalDog 10 Nov 2012 23:39:56 23,928 posts
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    Still digging myself out of the deficit hole an inch at a time.
    Next update

    Techno, you're going great guns by the looks of it =) I'll try to catch up with you again tomorrow.
    Controllers were a major deal in the first one - I'm not anticipating them being make or break in this one, but more about will become clear later.
  • sunjumper 11 Nov 2012 00:39:07 3,253 posts
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    This year is harder than last.

    Next update. With this chapter 3 is finished and an intermission is done. With this I am almost through the opening chapters. I hope that with chapter 4 things should start to become really interesting.

    Official word count is now 12673.
    I am seriously lagging.

    Edited by sunjumper at 00:39:39 11-11-2012
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    Just about to pass the 75% mark. Huzzah.
  • Blerk Moderator 11 Nov 2012 00:51:00 48,224 posts
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    Congrats, meme - that's amazing!

    I finally managed to finish chapter 5, so I've uploaded it to the blog for the people who are somehow finding time to read. Thanks in advance for any thoughts and comments!

    And now... I'm going to have an earlier night. Word count is 22886, still slightly ahead of schedule.
  • RobTheBuilder 11 Nov 2012 03:15:29 6,521 posts
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    New chapters (hit 18k)

    15. Plotting
    Tony plots how to get out of his contract.
    http://nanowrimo-theentertainer.blogspot.co.uk/2012/11/15-plotting.html


    16. Episode Five
    Part one of the plot goes into action.
    http://nanowrimo-theentertainer.blogspot.co.uk/2012/11/16-episode-five.html
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    Day the ten
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 10:09:44 14,707 posts
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    @Carbon_Altered

    It was indeed Firefly. Although I think I've seen it used in some sci-fi novels - I can't remember the authors though.
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 10:55:42 14,707 posts
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    @MetalDog

    Thanks, looking forward to your comments.

    Day 10 comments:

    Wow, the opening paragraph punches you in the guts.

    "Szwejkowski hoofed it up the last flight," hoof seems an odd choice, to me it's a more of a comedic term.

    Another good update.
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 11:16:38 14,707 posts
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    @sunjumper

    Onto chapter 3:

    I don't quite understand this line - "An apartment in and apartment?"

    Some nice description as always.

    'to' should be 'too' in "Adrian was to tired to be surprised by the Devil’s sudden "

    Yay - Lucifer makes his presence known.
  • sunjumper 11 Nov 2012 11:27:44 3,253 posts
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    TechnoHippy wrote:
    @sunjumper

    Onto chapter 3:

    I don't quite understand this line - "An apartment in and apartment?"

    Some nice description as always.

    'to' should be 'too' in "Adrian was to tired to be surprised by the Devil’s sudden "

    Yay - Lucifer makes his presence known.
    Thanks for the feedback as always.

    That should had been 'an apartment in an apartment' damn my fingers.

    By the way did you read the prologue?
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 12:30:29 14,707 posts
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    @Blerk

    Good going on the word count.

    On to chapter 5 part 3:

    I think, come the edit, you could split the chapters up a bit more.

    Interesting turn on the discovered world. A similar fate awaits Earth?
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 13:03:20 14,707 posts
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    @RobTheBuilder

    Good work on the word count.

    Chapter 15:

    I like the plan - I see plenty of potential for some fun here :-)

    And already it's turning to the absrurb - excellent.

    Chapter 16:

    Marvellous - making me chuckle.
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 13:04:25 14,707 posts
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    @sunjumper

    I believe I did, but my brain is holy - like a sieve.
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 13:23:15 14,707 posts
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    @meme

    Remarkable word count - I want what you're on :-)

    Day 10 feedback:

    More good stuff, although I have to confess I'm struggling to keep up with the different threads.
  • Blerk Moderator 11 Nov 2012 13:24:24 48,224 posts
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    TechnoHippy wrote:
    @Blerk

    Good going on the word count.

    On to chapter 5 part 3:

    I think, come the edit, you could split the chapters up a bit more.

    Interesting turn on the discovered world. A similar fate awaits Earth?
    Indeed, they're turning out super-long. They are naturally split into scenes, so I might turn each scene into a chapter instead, or split the chapter into numbered sections. Or something. :)
  • TechnoHippy 11 Nov 2012 16:08:44 14,707 posts
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    Chapter 17 puts me above 18,000 words.

    http://zenapocalypse.blogspot.co.uk/2012/11/faust-20-chapter-17.html
  • Deleted user 11 November 2012 16:27:55
    TechnoHippy wrote:
    @meme

    Remarkable word count - I want what you're on :-)

    Day 10 feedback:

    More good stuff, although I have to confess I'm struggling to keep up with the different threads.
    Thanks! And yeah, I need to sort out the threads. I'm toying with the idea of, in the editing pass, actually scrapping the 1880 and 1945 threads, because I think I've worked out a way to mostly ignore them.

    In fact, I may think about dropping the 2012 framing as well and shift 2008 to modern day. But this is all just 'what ifs' at the moment. Need to see how it is once it's completed. But it definitely needs tidying up at the moment - my writing right now effectively consists of "what part do I feel like writing now?" so there's some logical disparity between shifts.
  • RobTheBuilder 11 Nov 2012 16:58:10 6,521 posts
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    @TechnoHippy Cheers :)
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