@santashi That's really useful, thank you.
I suppose they aren't all likeable, but I don't want people to dislike Tony of course!
I'm glad the sponge cake bit worked, that took a discussion on seventies comedians with my dad to find the right line! Nice to know it isn't just me who thinks these things are amusing.gif)
I've fixed the repetitive phrasing at the start of chapter 2, and am thinking about the barman bit. It was meant to be both a fourth wall thing, but also a comment on the absurdity of the situation (which is inspired by the guy who died recently after creating his own nation on an island off the coast).
Much appreciated! I just wrote a Jimmy Savile reference which I'm not sure about, that may need looking at later..!!
I suppose they aren't all likeable, but I don't want people to dislike Tony of course!
I'm glad the sponge cake bit worked, that took a discussion on seventies comedians with my dad to find the right line! Nice to know it isn't just me who thinks these things are amusing
I've fixed the repetitive phrasing at the start of chapter 2, and am thinking about the barman bit. It was meant to be both a fourth wall thing, but also a comment on the absurdity of the situation (which is inspired by the guy who died recently after creating his own nation on an island off the coast).
Much appreciated! I just wrote a Jimmy Savile reference which I'm not sure about, that may need looking at later..!!
“That also means I've had to squeeze (boyband) To The Left into dressing room 5, I won't say it's cramped in there, but somewhere a zombie Jimmy Savile just crawled out of his grave.”Edited by RobTheBuilder at 14:40:12 09-11-2012
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