This thread has gone rather quiet... where are you people?
I probably won't get to update today. But I will be writing later. Which probably means that I will pass the 50k with five days overtime which all things considered is actually pretty OK. That would mean I'm writing 10k a week right now which is not too shabby.
But before I write it is time for a midnight snack and some feedback.
@Carbon_Altered
Chapter 10
Very good point about the role of the companions.
If I had been in Chen’s place people would have died.
How did Delilah get rid of the gangsters?
The conversation between Kel and Delilah is hilarious.
You say that your descriptions aren’t any good but as I keep on reading my internal picture of the space station become more and more clear. I’d like to say vivid but it is really more of a derelict kept going by its minimal crew.
Whatever you may think the atmosphere in this story is very good.
UV sulphate???
"On whether you take a bite of this cucumber for me, in the name of science"
What a great last line. (I envy you for your elegant chapter exits)
If Chen really is trying to blow up the factory that was prioritised over alien life I would totally help him. Really. VFM that…
Chapter 11
I’m not sure that Kel is that dim. The plan of Chen’s looks rather obvious to me.
You know. I did not think anything Kel could ever say was going to change my mind.
It did.
Chapter 12
Is this what I think it is?
I like the short handled spade..gif)
Like the tech bit. Plausible and clever. I know I am a bit late for the party but in general virtually all value for money calculations made in the present are incredibly heavy weighted towards the short term, with mid-term effects (a few years) coming a very distant second.
This leads often to plans that have potentially great to catastrophic disadvantages in the long term that are invisible to the system. An AI programed accordingly would never see such things coming and when they did happen would have no capacity at all to understand why it happened. (Human intelligence has also difficulties with this when using flawed models) This is something that a clever human (e.g. the space pirates) can use to their great advantage.
Not quite what I expected (I thought they might have broken into the ship containing our other protagonists to steal from them) but a very cool chapter.
I wonder though how they are ever going to get out of there at 2.7g. I would have expected to reduce the acceleration of the ship at least for some time until they get out.
Another very tiny nit-pick. From you description of spyders I assume that finding one is really bad news yet because they have just hacked the ship AI I am not quite sure if this is the case. You may add another line later on to make it clear whether they are in deep shit (as I expect) or if they have hit an unexpected jackpot in form of their very own tame spyder.
I’d love to go on reading but I have writing to do and it is getting worryingly late.
I probably won't get to update today. But I will be writing later. Which probably means that I will pass the 50k with five days overtime which all things considered is actually pretty OK. That would mean I'm writing 10k a week right now which is not too shabby.
But before I write it is time for a midnight snack and some feedback.
@Carbon_Altered
Chapter 10
Very good point about the role of the companions.
If I had been in Chen’s place people would have died.
How did Delilah get rid of the gangsters?
The conversation between Kel and Delilah is hilarious.
You say that your descriptions aren’t any good but as I keep on reading my internal picture of the space station become more and more clear. I’d like to say vivid but it is really more of a derelict kept going by its minimal crew.
Whatever you may think the atmosphere in this story is very good.
UV sulphate???
"On whether you take a bite of this cucumber for me, in the name of science"
What a great last line. (I envy you for your elegant chapter exits)
If Chen really is trying to blow up the factory that was prioritised over alien life I would totally help him. Really. VFM that…
Chapter 11
I’m not sure that Kel is that dim. The plan of Chen’s looks rather obvious to me.
You know. I did not think anything Kel could ever say was going to change my mind.
It did.
Chapter 12
Is this what I think it is?
I like the short handled spade.
Like the tech bit. Plausible and clever. I know I am a bit late for the party but in general virtually all value for money calculations made in the present are incredibly heavy weighted towards the short term, with mid-term effects (a few years) coming a very distant second.
This leads often to plans that have potentially great to catastrophic disadvantages in the long term that are invisible to the system. An AI programed accordingly would never see such things coming and when they did happen would have no capacity at all to understand why it happened. (Human intelligence has also difficulties with this when using flawed models) This is something that a clever human (e.g. the space pirates) can use to their great advantage.
Not quite what I expected (I thought they might have broken into the ship containing our other protagonists to steal from them) but a very cool chapter.
I wonder though how they are ever going to get out of there at 2.7g. I would have expected to reduce the acceleration of the ship at least for some time until they get out.
Another very tiny nit-pick. From you description of spyders I assume that finding one is really bad news yet because they have just hacked the ship AI I am not quite sure if this is the case. You may add another line later on to make it clear whether they are in deep shit (as I expect) or if they have hit an unexpected jackpot in form of their very own tame spyder.
I’d love to go on reading but I have writing to do and it is getting worryingly late.
