@Blerk Good work on the word count. I think you made the right choice, sometimes you just have to bull your way through and clean up the mess later.|
Anyway, here are my thoughts on chapter 15:
The second sentence is very long.
Why is the General telling him all this?
I was wondering when the possibility of more advanced Earths would come up, although that raises the possibility of an attack from one or more of them.
Megalomania is a wonderful thing
It seems odd that the son is almost an afterthought.
Although it ends on a suitably sinister tone - I approve
#9598358, By TechnoHippy National Novel Writing Month 2012
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