#9356633, By TechnoHippy National Novel Writing Month 2012

  • TechnoHippy 8 Feb 2013 20:33:29 14,698 posts
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    @Blerk

    Good to see the next part up!

    "alleyway back in the , but" - missing word after the?

    The natives seemed to be very well attuned to other people. Interesting.

    How does Kurt know the term "special forces teams"? Mind you, he's speaking English so I guess they have a similar concept.

    Nasty WMD.

    I'm wondering now if there's something else at play in the extermination. I can well believe we took advantage of the situation, but genocide seems a bit much for grabbing resources.

    All in all another excellent chapter.

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