Thank you very much for your feedback!
The price of amnesia was in great part exactly for that. To cut the boring crap out of stories. So far it means that I could simply focus on what I thought was important, it also helped see when things were just 'blah, blah, blah' that went nowhere.
I am now considering to use better cuts in normal stories too. Films never feel the need (well most of them) to bore you with age long transitions and of those that do the really good ones make all the transition worth seeing.
I am going to have a long hard look at the bear bit after I'm done. There are a few things there that strike me as good ideas that don't quite work.
Adman and Adrian. Damn. I was sure that this time there was no name confusion. For most of the story I should be in the clear though.
#9211952, By sunjumper National Novel Writing Month 2012
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