#9192777, By sunjumper National Novel Writing Month 2012

  • sunjumper 30 Nov 2012 13:17:09 3,196 posts
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    TechnoHippy wrote:
    @sunjumper

    Keep on going!

    Chapter 9:

    "As he had introduced him self his deep voice rumbled through the room like a rock slide, shaking the people in the room and bewildering the elephants in the local zoo" - Nice line - I'd be tempted to leave out the people in the room part to make it snappier?

    I like Darius, in fact you have a good mix of characters.

    Love the tour bus :-)

    Awesome - that chapter had me smiling all the way through it.
    Thank you!
    At one moment I was not sure, thinking that I might be exaggerating a bit, but then I noticed that that's what I was originally aiming for.

    Juggling all the characters is a bit of a nightmare, but so far it seems to be working.
    Ironically having that many different characters on scene makes it easier to keep them in character as it is a more conscious effort to get into their point of view to write them compared to a story with only a few characters. The latter have a slight tendency (when I'm writing obviously) to blend with each other a bit.
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