TechnoHippy wrote:Thank you, I enjoy the comments. Yeah tenses are a problem when I switch between the narration and the thoughts of the character. I'll try and make it more clear in the future.
Yeah, the characters are pretty idiotic. I suppose the idea is that they sort of think they're profound and philosophical but they aren't. Hopefully the irony creates some humour.
It is all part of a wider arc, right now it's kind of hard as it is early days but I want to make the world tangible enough so each post can work comfortably as a self-contained unit or as part of the big picture. Did you read the about page? That's kind of all the info I want to give right now. As long as you're interested I don't mind criticism!
Thanks for the compliment on the writing, these pieces are all like 2nd drafts so yeah they can do with some cleaning up.
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