@meme I haven't time to read the whole thing right now, but having read the first couple of pages, my advice would be to cut down the number of adverbs and adjectives. It should make your writing a lot crisper. It's tempting to keep adding them, feeling like you're painting a more vivid picture, but readers can be left to do that for themselves if they're enjoying the story.|
As usual, if anyone wants to take a look at the action serial I've been writing for the past few months, check it out here:
If you want to skip straight to the most recent one, the page has short recaps for each previous instalment.
Edited by xandaca at 16:35:06 12-02-2012
#8416144, By xandaca NaNoWriMo 2011
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